Final Draft:)

Slums negatively impact humans because they are over-crowded,unsanitary, and have high disease rates.A slum is a very bad thing it can effect many people .A slum is really bad and dirty place that is over populated and can be very bad
Slums is a place that has alot of people living there.
If you to live here in the valley and then go to a slum you would hate it because it is over populated.
Slums are unsanitary and most likely unsafe
A slum can be a unhealthy place to liveslums are really unsanitary ,can get sick and get a bad infection because of the dirty water a slum is an area with a high disease rate it will cause you death and create a really bad disease infection.a place like this will cause death and has many viruses running around
  if you can die it can be possible that you will be able to die of a simple infection.Have you ever felt trapped in a specific place and feel you will never get out of there?
Slums negatively impact humans because they are over-crowded,unsanitary,and have high disease rates.A slum will create a really bad impact in your life and will be a bad effect in your life.

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   Have you ever felt trapped in a specific place, and feel you will never get out of there?A slum is a very populated area that has sewage water floating around.Slums negatively impact humans because they are over-crowded, unsanitary, and have high disease rates.The slum will affect childern if it is over-crowded.

Outline:D

Slums negatively impact humans because they are over-crowded,unsanitary, and have high disease rates.A slum is a very bad thing it can effect many people .A slum is really bad and dirty place that is over populated and can be very bad
Slums is a place that has alot of people living there.
If you to live here in the valley and then go to a slum you would hate it because it is over populated.
Slums are unsanitary and most likely unsafe
A slum can be a unhealthy place to liveslums are really unsanitary ,can get sick and get a bad infection because of the dirty water a slum is an area with a high disease rate it will cause you death and create a really bad disease infection.a place like this will cause death and has many viruses running around
  if you can die it can be possible that you will be able to die of a simple infection.Have you ever felt trapped in a specific place and feel you will never get out of there?
Slums negatively impact humans because they are over-crowded,unsanitary,and have high disease rates.A slum will create a really bad impact in your life and will be a bad effect in your life.

my thesis statement

A Slum is a city that has sewage water flowing and it gets flooded,over populated,and disgustingly dirty.

my thesis

Slums are thickly populated ,run-down, squalid part of a city inhabited by poor people.A slum is affects people because there are lots of trash and the houses are over populated and affect the people life style some people decide to stay in a poor place like that.